Coming Home Review

The story itself was much better than the writing. The author knew exactly what story she wanted to tell and told it fully and completely, no loose ends or unfinished situations. It was also a very positive story; a young woman is duty bound to return to her unhappy childhood home and what begins as an onerous task becomes a chance for her to mend the broken places in her heart. Love lost is regained, family is reunited and, when she discovers she is financially blessed, she is determined to do what she can to make her world a better place.

Let me be blunt, the writing is awful.

"...Her grandmother really didn't want her to live with her, but there was nowhere else for her to go, except to put her in an orphanage. She was sure her grandmother would have did that but for the way the town would have gossiped about her, made her rethink her decision. ..."

What this book desperately needs is an editor and what the author needs is writing lessons. Run-on sentences, short choppy sentences, bad grammar and colloquialisms abound. Reading the book was hard because the writing was so bad; the flow of the story was constantly interrupted by grammatical errors and fractured syntax. It was the reading equivalent of driving down a washboard road; bam, bam, bam, bam!

I wish the author would redo the book, work with an editor to smooth out all of the rough spots and more fully develop the characters. If she can get the writing under control this can be a very good read, a book that will make you feel better on a rainy day or banish the blues. I really hope she will take those writing classes and try again.

For the story line I give her a solid  3  stars but the writing only gets about a 1.5.